Saturday, October 30, 2010

Written Poem 2

Forever In Our Hearts


The crosses were placed.
Each row like its next.
The men weren't replaced.

They lie where relatives paced.
Sagas filtered into context when
the crosses were placed

Through each season they embraced,
its simple, not perplexed,
the men weren't replaced.

What horrors they'd faced,
doing what no one expects.
The crosses were placed.

They died with grace.
Their past in school projects.
The men weren't replaced

Humans can travel to space
Grandchildren can text their friends
The crosses were placed
the men weren't replaced

CWong

5 comments:

  1. Impressive original, Chad! Your first and third lines were short, yet impactful. Nice touch to add "texting" to your last stanza. It gives the poem a sense of time (WWI/WWII era to nowadays). You should read this at the Rememberance Day Assembly with the Creative Writing kids! Hahaha!

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  2. Very nice original poem chad. This is-like Lana said-a poem that could be read at the Remembrance Day assembly. This poem shows the contrast between the veterans, and our generation. It is also a nice tribute to all of those who fought in WWI/WWII. Good job Chad!

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  3. This poem is one of the most impressing ones I have read! I enjoyed the rhyming and the contrast between us lazy teenagers and the veterans who worked hard to protect our country. Very original theme and a great poem, congratulations!

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  4. Strong. The two refrains are excellently used in cooperation. The verses were strikingly powerful yet somber. The words were surrounded by death yet they still shone passionately. Great verse.

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  5. Chad, such a beautiful villanelle. I'm not really sure what else I can say about it, it is so striking and honest. This poem is one of the best I've read so far and you're doing a great job. I look forward to reading more of your work!

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